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The Set Up - an Iron Man story

 
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PostPosted: May Sun 02, 2010 7:14 pm    Post subject: The Set Up - an Iron Man story Reply with quote

Disclaimer: The following story is fiction. The characters are not meant to represent any real persons. I do not own the characters and make no money from this story. This is just a story.

The Set Up

By Dbud (feedback requested)

The following story is based on the next installment of the Iron Man franchise. I haven’t seen the movie yet but from the reviews and articles I have pieced together some plot points. <Warning-Mild Spoilers> Pepper Potts is apparently running Stark industries while Tony of off being Iron Man. Natasha Romanoff, AKA the Black Widow, is undercover as an assistant working for Tony. She actually works for Nick Fury as a SHIELD agent. Also, the government wants to get their hands on the Iron Man technology but Tony won’t co-operate.

The above plot points led to the following story.

Starring:

Scarlett Johansson as Natasha Romanoff; currently posing as Tony Stark’s assistant but actually working for the government undercover.





Gwyneth Paltrow as Pepper Potts; current CEO of Stark Industries





Leslie Bibb as reporter Christine Everhart who will do anything to get a scoop.



Tony Stark, notorious playboy, owner of a vast corporate empire, one of the wealthiest men in the world and creator and wielder of the most advanced weapons system on the planet; reached up and took hold of the large full beautifully round tits bouncing up and down over his face.

He squeezed them hard, pinching the small dark rock hard nipples between his fingers. Pulling them down towards him, he wrapped his mouth around the right one and sucked on it hard.

Christine Everhart, whose tits he was sucking, was bouncing up and down on his cock wildly.

“OH GOD TONY! YES! THAT’S IT! MORE!”

She was screaming as she felt his hard-on inside her and his hand mauling her breasts. Sweat streamed down her golden tanned skin making it glisten. Just as she was about to reach an orgasmic crescendo, Tony pushed her to the side and off him.

“What the f**k?!?!” she looked up a bit bewildered.

Tony took her long blonde hair in his hands and pulled her face towards his crotch. Guiding his cock with his left hand, he slipped it between her lips and into her mouth. While Christine was a bit ticked off that her third orgasm of the night had been interrupted, now didn’t seem the time for bringing that up, so she eagerly accepted his shaft and began sucking on it.

“Oh f**k yeah!” Tony muttered as she worked his cock with her tongue and lips. He was using her hair as an anchor to push her head up and down his sex organ.

After several long strokes, he pulled her head towards his groin, driving his cock deep into her throat. Christine’s eyes went wide and began to water as his cock pushed past her tonsils. It was a good thing her gag reflex had been suppressed through years of use or else she would have barfed all over his five thousand dollar silk sheets and ruined them.

He held her there, with her nose buried against him and his cock in her throat for a long half a minute. It wasn’t until Christine began to make gagging noises from a lack of oxygen that he let her come up for air.

As she inhaled deeply and caught her breath, Tony, still holding her by the hair, flipped her around so she was facing the headboard. Grabbing the wood, Christine braced herself for what she knew was coming. Tony positioned himself behind her and guided his cock into her cunt.

“OH f**k!” She let out a scream as she was penetrated yet again. Taking her by the hips, Tony pounded his cock into her over and over and harder and harder. The slapping sound of his hip ramming into her buttocks filled the bedroom along with his grunting and her squealing.

After a minute or so, Christine looked back over her shoulder at him as she felt him pull out. But then she felt something pressing against the tight small opening between her ass cheeks.

“Wait Tony! I...”

Tony forced his cock into her rectum without hesitation.

“AHHHH! OH f**k! TONY! WAIT PLEASE! I DON’T KNOW IF I CAN...”

Tony took her hips and with a hard thrust drove his cock as deep into her a**hole as he could.

“YYYYAAAAIIIIII!” Christine shrieked as her a**hole was stretched out beyond its limit.

“OH sh*t that’s tight!” Tony replied as his cock was squeezed by her sphincter muscles.

Tony began pumping her ass with his cock as Christine grabbed hold of the headboard; gripping the wood so tight her knuckles turned white. She was grunting with each thrust as she her face was twisted in a grimace and her teeth clenched.

As he f**ked her from behind, Tony lifted his hand and brought him palm down hard across her right ass cheek.

SLAP!

“YYYYYAAAAAHHHHHH!”

Christine screamed again as she felt a sharp stinging across her ass as she was spanked.

After only a few seconds more, Tony made a loud grunting noise as he felt his climax building. He grabbed her hips and held them as he thrust himself back and forth.

“OH f**k! I’m gonna cum!”

‘TOO DEEP! I CAN”T HANDLE IT! IT’S TOO DEEEEEEEPPPPPPP!”

Tony drove his cock into Christine, who let out another squeal which Tony ignored as his body stiffened and he blew a heavy load of cum deep inside her a**hole.

He was quivering as he kept reaming her ass savoring his climax as it took hold of his muscles. Christine gritted her teeth as she waited for his cock to soften and his orgasm to subside.

After several long seconds, he pulled out and she gingerly sat back, “thank god,” she muttered to herself as Tony rolled out of bed and headed into the bathroom; ignoring her.

A few minutes later, he came back and laid back on the mattress. Christine looked over at him lustfully.

“You want something to drink baby?” she purred.

Tony nodded in between deep heavy breaths as he was still recovering from the vigorous f**k session the two of them just had. Christine got up, picking up Tony’s crisp white dress shirt that probably cost more than she made in week. She pulled it on and walked over to the bar. Returning to bed, she handed Tony a glass of scotch with a single ice cube in it.

He gulped it down in only two mouthfuls.

Christine lay down on the bed next to him and began kissing his neck and letting her tongue run around his ear. A few seconds later...

“Tony?”

She took his chin and turned his head towards her. His eyes were closed. She snapped her fingers in front of his face. He was out cold.

“Man that was fast.”

The tall tanned blonde slipped out of the bed and took her cell phone. Dialing...

“It’s me,” she said when the call connected to the number she had been given.

“I’ll be right up,” a woman replied and then hung up.

Christine slipped down the hall and stood at the top of the large curved staircase that led from the second floor of Tony’s mansion to the first. She only waited a few seconds when the front door opened and a female with flame red hair walked inside.

The woman moved quickly to the stairs and as she approached Christine...

“Where is he?”

“Um, ah, the bedroom.”

Christine had met Natasha, Tony’s assistant several times. In those meetings, she was always dressed professionally, usually in a silk blouse, skirt and heels. Perhaps her skirts were a bit too short, and her blouses a bit too sheer and low cut, and her heels a bit too high, but still professional. Plus Christine was not really one to criticize another woman for using her sex appeal to get ahead. Sleeping with men to get stories was becoming a habit for her.

But this time Natasha looked totally different. She had on a body hugging dark blue cat-suit. Instead of heels, she had on a heavy pair of boots with thick black soles. Around her waist was a heavy belt with all sorts of pouches and cases. On her right hip was a large handgun and sticking out from her left boot was the handle of a knife.

The entire outfit shocked Christine but she followed the red haired beauty down the hall.

“Um, so who do you work for again?”

“The government but the less you know the better for you.”

Natasha approached the bed and sat down next to Tony’s naked body. She took his arm in her hand and held two fingers against his wrist as she looked down at her watch and checked his pulse. She pulled a small penlight from her belt and gently lifted his eyelid. Moving the light across his pupil a few times, she seemed satisfied and stood.

“He seems okay. How much did you give him?”

“Just what you told me to. But look I think we need to talk about what this is all about. So, you’re going to blackmail him? Right?”

“Exactly,” Natasha responded.

Christine pulled a cigarette from her purse, lit it and took a long drag, “So, what are you going to do? Take incriminating pictures or something? Go through his computers?”

“Something like that. You’re not having second thoughts are you?”

“No, of course not, I get the exclusive story right? The rise and fall of an American icon.”

Natasha stood and smiled, “Of course. That was the deal. You help us set Tony up. We get his technology and you get the scoop. Everyone’s a winner.”

“Well, I’ve been thinking that maybe I should get something more for my part in this.”

Natasha gave Christine a hard look, but she was an experienced reporter. She had interviewed terrorists and dictators; she wasn’t going to be intimidated by anyone.

“Like what?”

“Like ten million dollars.”

“What!?!?!”

“I did all the hard stuff. I slept with him after all.”

“Please. You slept with him long before I came along and we both know you would have done so again for a lot less than ten million.”

Christine couldn’t argue, “That’s not the point. My entire career is on the line. People in my business already think I’m a slut...”

“I wonder why.”

“...but if this were to get out, what I did to Tony, I’d be done for.”

Natasha seemed to be thinking about her offer, “Well, you did do a lot to help, so at the least I think I should tell you the details of the plan before we discuss your payment.”

“O-okay, what else is there to know?”

“Well Christine, the problem with blackmailing someone like Tony is his lifestyle. I mean, he already sleeps with a different supermodel every week. His alcohol and drug use are well documented. Hell, I don’t even know if we could doctor photos that would top the ones that came out after that Easter weekend in Mexico.”

“Oh yeah, him and all those midgets.”

“And the donkey, don’t forget the donkey.”

“Right. So what are you going to do?”

“I’m afraid we will need something more serious to make Tony play ball with us.”

Christine turned and realized the red-haired cat suit wearing agent was looking at her with an intensity that she found unsettling, “Um, like what?”

“We decided the only way to get Tony to really co-operate is if he feels he has absolutely no choice. So, when he wakes up next to your dead body and we make it look like he killed you in a drunken rage. He will have no choice but to let us help cover it up and we’ll own him and the armor.”

Christine’s face turned ghost white and she took several steps backwards, “Uh what? What are you talking about? You said you just needed me to slip him the drug you gave me.”

“Well, for obvious reasons I couldn’t tell you the entire plan.”

Christine began to ease towards the door to the hall.

“Look if this is about the money, we can forget about that.”

Natasha placed her right fist in the palm of her left hand and cracked her knuckles.

Suddenly overcome by blinding fear, Christine ran for the hall, “NO! HELP! SOMEONE HELP!”

Before she made it to the doors, she felt a sharp pain in her back as she was thrown forward. The blonde reporter was knocked off her feet and slammed face first into the wall. The beautiful blonde’s forehead bounced off the plaster, leaving her dazed.

Natasha grabbed her thick golden hair and pulled her head back, “Don’t fight Christine. Just relax and I’ll make this as painless as possible.”

As she spoke, Christine, in a panic, spun and flung a wild fist which caught Natasha across the chin. It was a lucky punch but a strong one and the super spy staggered backwards.

Almost immediately Christine regretted her impetuous move. Natasha Romanoff lifted her hand and wiped the small trickle of blood from her nose on the back of her glove. She looked down at the small red smear and then up at the terrified pretty blonde reporter.

“Please, I’m sorry. There must be another way.”

Natasha reached down and drew a large knife from her boot. Lunging forward she grabbed Christine around the neck and placed the blade against her throat.

“NO PLEASE!”

Natasha pulled her towards the bed and roughly tossed her down next to Tony’s unconscious form.

“Don’t worry bitch! I’m not going to stab you to death.”

Seeing one of Tony’s silk red ties hanging from the headboard, Natasha slipped the blade back into its sheath and took the tie. She then leapt onto the bed on top of Christine.

“I have to make this look like he killed you in a drunken moment. He wouldn’t use a knife, that wouldn’t make sense. But he would wring your neck with one of his own neckties.”

“No, please, stop. Don’t do this.”

The two women struggled for a few seconds as Christine grabbed Natasha’s arms and tried to keep her from her throat. Natasha had a wild look on her face and a wide smile. She was obviously enjoying this and getting a thrill from it. Natasha had killed many people in her duties as a secret agent, but, while she would never admit this because it would be considered unprofessional, she absolutely loved killing beautiful women most of all.

Natasha pulled back her gloved fist and drove it across the blonde’s chin, slamming it into her face. The punch seemed to daze Christine and allowed the agent a few seconds respite. Natasha grabbed her victim by the shoulder and flipped her onto her stomach. Straddling her waist, she pinned her down with her legs and wrapped the length of red silk several times around the pretty woman’s thin neck.

“Nooooo! NO STOP!” Christine screamed as she realized her predicament was becoming dire.

“SHUT UP BITCH! You’re doing your country a great service.”

She drove her knee between Christine’s shoulder blades and wound the ends of the tie around her hands and pulled hard, the fabric digging into her fists.

“UURRRKKK!”

Christine made a grunting noise as the length of silk tightened around her throat an cut off her air. She immediately began thrashing and fighting for breath. Reaching up she tried to pull the fabric from her neck but Natasha was pulling too hard and the tie was too tight, digging into her flesh too deep be pulled free.

Reaching back with one of her arms she tried to push her murderess off her, but it was no use. She could get no leverage and was helpless.

Taking both ends of the tie in her left hand, Natasha used her free hand to force Christine’s arm down to the bed and then pinned it under her kneecap.

“Don’t worry baby,” she purred almost seductively, “this will be over for you soon.”

Grabbing the ends of the tie again, she wound them around her fists and pulled back with all her strength as she forced her knee into Christine’s back and drove down. The reporter’s back was arched as she was pulled and pushed in two opposite directions.

“GGYYAAAHHH!”

Christine Everhart’s face was turning red and her eyes bulging as the life was wrung from her. She hadn’t had a decent breath in nearly a minute. She was gagging and, with her one free arm, flailing and fighting to get free.

Natasha pulled the fabric even tighter. She bit down on her lip, enjoying the pain in her mouth as well as the burning in her arms and hands from the exertion.

Christine began to quake and convulse as her body rebelled from its imminent death. She was jerking wildly as Natasha kept the pressure up. She knew the end was near for Christine but she felt no mercy for the poor woman whose life she was snuffing. Instead, she felt her pussy growing wet and her excitement level rising as Christine’s end grew near.

The blonde’s breathing was non-existent and she could barely make a sound as there was no air in her lungs to do so. Christine’s head fell forward and her body and arms went limp. The only movements were small jerks as her body unconsciously fought against its end.

Natasha fell forward, laying down and letting her weight fall onto Christine’s back. Her large full tits fell across the back of the blonde’s head as she held the tie around her throat even now. Another minute passed and the jerks and twitches of the dead woman under her subsided.

Finally, when she was sure Christine was dead only then did Natasha roll off her. Laying between the pretty corpse lying face down and Tony’s unconscious body, Natasha was panting and breathing deeply.

“God that was great!” she purred.

Reaching up she took the zipper to her cat-suit and pulled it down her front, letting her D cup tits fall free. She dug her fingers into the soft pale flesh and raked her nails across her tit.

She slipped her other hand down under the light stretch fabric of her cat suit. She worked her finger down between her legs and began massaging the soft wet folds of her cunt.

“OH f**k!”

Almost immediately she felt an explosion of orgasmic pleasure wash over her. Natasha’s back arched sharply as she began to thrash back and forth quivering and jerking in pleasure.

“UMMMMM! OHHHHH!”

She was moaning loudly as she spread her legs rubbing her clit and driving her fingers in and out of her pussy. Natasha was lost in her own world as she felt wave after wave of the most intense orgasm she’d felt in year’s blast through her. Finally, after several long minutes she collapsed back breathing heavily.

Shakily, she climbed to her feet and zipped up her bodysuit.

“Wow, that was incredible”, she muttered to herself.

She knew she was supposed to call into headquarters to tell her boss, Nick Fury who was the head of SHIELD, that the mission was done. But instead Natasha had other plans.

She pulled a small black device from her belt. Wrapping the thin harness it was attached to it around her throat; she affixed the device about halfway down the front of her neck.

“Pepper, this is Tony…”

As she spoke, her voice came out with a strange metallic sound to it.

Ahem

She cleared her throat and tried again.

“Pepper, this is Tony.”

This time her voice came out not as her own but much deeper and masculine. It was the voice of Tony Stark. She flipped open Tony’s cell phone and scrolled to Pepper’s number and pressed the dial button. It only rang once...

“Tony?”

It was Pepper Potts; Tony’s former assistant and now CEO of his company.

“Pepper, this is Tony. Something’s happened. I need you at my house right away.”

“What? What happened Tony? Are you okay?”

“I’m fine. Just come right away and don’t tell anyone where you are going.”

Natasha hung up.

About twenty minutes later...

Pepper Potts’ car roared up out front and she jumped out and ran inside. She was wearing a short black evening dress and super high heels. Her outfit was designed to show off her best feature, her long sleek smooth legs. She had been at a party when she got the frantic call from Tony. She had left immediately without even telling her date she was doing so. There was nothing she wouldn’t do for him.

She ran inside and up the stairs calling for her boss. When she reached the bedroom the sight did not even shock her. She had caught Tony in bed with numerous women over the course of her time with him. She shook him.

“Tony! I’m here! What’s wr...?”

She realized tony was responding. He was unconscious. She turned to the nude female body next to him. It was Christine, the reporter. Pepper moved to the edge of the bed and saw the woman’s face. Her eyes were staring straight ahead and she realized one of Tony’s expensive ties was wrapped around her throat.

“Oh god! Tony no...”

The implication of what had happened was obvious but Pepper didn’t want to believe it.

“Don’t worry...”

Pepper spun as a feminine voice came from the darkness of the closet.

“...he didn’t kill her.”

Natasha Romanoff stepped from the darkness.

“I did.”

“What? Why? I can’t believe this?”

“Believe it Pepper.”

Pepper Potts moved backwards away from the cat-suit wearing woman. Once she reached the nightstand next to Tony’s bed she turned and yanked open the top drawer. She grabbed the handgun she knew Tony kept there and spun back towards Natasha, leveling the weapon at her.

“Hands up.”

Natasha complied.

“I don’t know what’s going on here but I’ll let the police sort it out. I warned Tony not to hire you. I always knew something was wrong about you.”

Natasha just rolled her eyes. She didn’t seem afraid at the gun being pointed at her in the slightest. Pepper reached into her purse and pulled her cell phone out and began dialing. As she did, she took her eyes off Natasha for a moment and the secret agent reached down to her utility belt and pressed a button. Just then, Pepper’s cell phone lost its signal.

“What the hell?!?!”

“Cell jammer,” Natasha told her.

“Damn you, you bitch!”

Pepper dropped the phone but kept the gun pointed at Natasha’s massive tits.

“Don’t move or else I’ll...”

“Or else you’ll do what? Do you really think I wouldn’t take the bullets out of Tony’s gun before you got here?”

Pepper’s face turned white as she tried to figure out if she was telling the truth. For a split second, Pepper let her concentration wane and the tip of the gun sagged a bit. That momentary lapse was all Natasha and her highly trained reflexes needed.

She lunged forward, diving to the floor. Pepper was startled and, almost without even thinking about it, she pulled the trigger.

BLAM BLAM BLAM BLAM!!!

She fired wildly. The large caliber bullets ripping massive holes in the plaster of the bedroom walls.

Natasha was safely out of the weapons trajectory as she rolled into a ball when she hit the floor. Moving across the room in moments, she sprang to her feet and leapt into the air, kicking upward with her right foot. Her boot caught Pepper’s forearm with such force that the bones in her wrist snapped and the gun went flying across the room.

“AAAAIIIIIEEE!”

Pepper screamed in pain as her wrist broke. As she was momentarily in shock from the agony that caused, Natasha moved again.

She slammed her fist into Pepper’s ribs, just below her armpit. She felt the woman’s side start to give way and felt a satisfying crunch as she broke or at least fractured several of Pepper’s ribs.

The tall beautiful woman’s face twisted in a new agony as she felt a sharp pain from her side. Pepper was not a fighter and had no way to defend herself against a skilled killer.

As Pepper staggered back and nearly collapsed, Natasha took her by the arm and turned, pressing her back against Pepper’s body. Using her leverage, she lifted Pepper’s one hundred and fifteen pounds off the floor. Spinning, she used a judo throw to whip Pepper feet over head and into the air.

The blonde CEO sailed halfway across the room and slammed into a glass display case that held various awards and trophies that Tony had collected over the years.

CRASH!

Pepper’s body ripped through the glass doors and shelves before landing in a heap on the floor. Her dress torn and her body bleeding from the shards. She rolled onto her back and was trying to climb to her feet as Natasha approached her.

“Please, Natasha, why are you doing this?”

The government agent grabbed Pepper by her long blonde hair and jerked her to her feet.

“Why?”

She slammed her fist into Pepper’s pretty face, staggering her back into the wall.

“Because you are a royal bitch, that’s why!”

WHOOPH!

Natasha lifted Pepper off her feet with a punch to her gut.

“You’ve always looked down on me, ever since I got hired here.”

WHAM!

Another punch snapped Pepper’s head back, breaking her nose and slamming her head back into the plaster of the wall, cracking it.

Grabbing her by the arms, Natasha pulled her forward and drove her knee up between Pepper’s long legs. Her kneecap slammed into the soft fleshy folds of her cunt.

“YYYAAHHHHH!”

Pepper screamed in pain as the most tender part of her body was slammed with tremendous force. Pepper’s knees slammed together and she grabbed her pussy as she fell to her knees. Pepper’s normally pretty face was twisted in agony like she had never known.

Natasha threw her mane of long thick red hair back and wiped the droplets of sweat from her forehead. She was panting.

“This is quite a workout,” she said to Pepper kneeling before her with a sarcastic tone in her voice. She sat back on the bed between Tony and Christine as she enjoyed the sight of Pepper in pain and on her knees.

“Pu-puleeze Natasha. Why are you doing this?”

The voluptuous woman in lycra leaned back and crossed her legs as she rolled her eyes.

“Honestly, you weren’t part of the plan. But I’m going off script and decided you needed to go too. Tony is the real prize. But getting rid of you will make him easier to control.”

Natasha stood and approached her second victim of the night.

“Let’s get this over with.”

“NO!”

Pepper screamed and, in spite of her pain, she lurched to her feet and pushed Natasha back. Catching her off balance, Pepper managed to knock Natasha back onto the bed as she then ran out of the bed room and into the hall.

“sh*t!”

Natasha ran after the CEO as she tottered down the hall on her spiked heels. Pepper reached the staircase and began moving towards the front doors as she looked back over her shoulder, a panicked look on her face.

Reaching the banister on the landing that overlooked the foyer, Natasha grabbed it and pulled herself up and over. Flipping in mid-air, she landed with the grace of a jungle cat on the marble floor of the entryway to the mansion. Also she cut off Pepper’s path of escape.

“Stay away from me you psycho!”

Pepper tried to run past but it was no use. She was no match for a highly trained killer. Natasha leapt into the air and spun her entire body, generating tremendous torque, she whipped her leg in a full 360 degree circle. Her booted foot slammed into Pepper’s cheek with such force she was thrown across the foyer. Pepper slammed into a large decorative table in the room; knocking a large vase off and onto the floor.

Pepper rolled off the table and onto the floor. She began to crawl towards the front door.

“Please Natasha. Don’t do this!”

Natasha stepped over Pepper, and knelt down, straddling her back. She placed Pepper in a chokehold, wrapping her arms around the blonde’s thin graceful neck.

“Jesus, you are one pathetic bitch! Just f***ing die already!”

CRACK!

Natasha snapped Pepper’s neck with practiced ease and the lithe blonde went limp. Natasha stood, turned and headed back upstairs whistling to herself as she did.

“Man, some days I really love this job.”

A few hours later...

Tony Stark’s eyes flickered open but he immediately shielded them from the lamp sitting next to the bed. His head was pounding and his eyesight blurry. He had felt like this many times in his life but it was rare that he would actually pass out. After years of heavy drinking he had built up a high tolerance.

“Jesus, how much did I have to drink?”

He raised his head and looked over and saw Christine on the bed next to him. He reached over and shook her, “Wake up baby.”

She didn’t move. He took her shoulder and rolled her onto her back. As she turned, her head fell to the side, facing him and he realized something was wrong. Her eyes were open and wide and staring blankly ahead. Her face was pale and her tongue was hanging out of her mouth. Wrapped around her throat as a bright red tie; one of his.

“What the f**k!?!!?”

He leapt to his knees and shook her, “CHRISTINE!”

He lifted her by the arms but she was limp in his hands.

“Oh god! What the hell happened to you?!?!

She was obviously dead.

Tony laid her body down on the mattress and sat down next to her. His mind was still foggy and he couldn’t remember anything of the past few hours. Just then he heard a noise; a soft sound coming from the bathroom.

He rushed in and flipped on the light. Sitting in the corner of the shower stall, with her knees pulled up to her chest was his new assistant, Natasha. She was wearing a dress but it was torn and hanging off her body. She was also barefoot.

He rushed to her, obviously concerned for her well-being.

“Oh my god, Natasha, what happened?”

As he reached her though, she looked up at him and screamed, “NO! TONY! Don’t! Please no more!”

He knelt down but did not touch her, she seemed terrified of him.

She turned and for the first time he saw her face. The entire left side of her face was black and blue; a mixture of bruises. Her lip was split open and her nose appeared broken. Dried blood was on her cheeks and lips.

“What the hell happened here Natasha? Christine is dead. Who did this to you both?”

Natasha looked up at him, tears running down her face, “You did Tony.”

A few minutes later, Tony and Natasha sat at a small table in the bedroom. He had wrapped Christine’s body in a sheet and he sat on the edge of the bed. Natasha had seemed to calm down enough to speak.

“Now tell me what happened?”

“A few hours ago, y-you called me and asked me to come over. I thought you needed me for some late night business deal, so I came. When I got here though, you were with Christine. You were both naked and obviously had been having sex.”

She paused as Tony handed her a cold wet towel which she applied to her battered face.

“You said you wanted to have a threesome with me and her. Apparently you hadn’t told Christine about your plans because she didn’t like the idea. Before I could even respond she started screaming at you. You said that if she wanted to keep writing stories on you she’d better do what you want. She refused and called you a pig and started to get dressed to leave. That’s when you attacked her.”

Tony was in shock at hearing what had happened.

“I tried to stop you but you turned on me and began hitting me. I must have passed out but I woke up a few minutes later I saw you on the bed on top of Christine. You were killing her; strangling her with your tie. Then you saw that I was awake and you came after me again. I thought you were going to kill me too but then Miss Potts arrived and stopped you from...”

“Pepper? Pepper was here too? Where?”

“I don’t know. I must have passed out again. I don’t even remember crawling into the shower.”

Natasha broke down sobbing.

Tony jumped up and ran into the hall. He ran room to room calling for Pepper as he looked for her. Rushing downstairs, he stopped halfway down the stairs in shock.

“OH GOD! PEPPER!”

Sprawled out on the floor, beaten and lifeless was the body of Pepper Potts.

“OH NO! How could I have done this?”

He knelt down next to her and scooped her limp body into his arms. Her head fell back as she stared up at him with dead eyes.

“p-pepper?”

He held her close, cradling her body as Natasha approached.

“Tony, it’s not your fault.”

“What? Of course it is. I killed her and Christine and I almost killed you.”

“You were drunk. You weren’t in your right mind.”

“That doesn’t matter. We need to call the police.”

“No, Tony, think about that. It will destroy you. All the good you’ve done will be ruined.”

“What are you talking about? I killed two women. We can’t cover that up!”

“No, you’re right. We can’t by ourselves, but I know some people. They work for the government. They are old contacts from a former job I used to have. Let me call them. They can help.”

Tony seemed in a complete daze. He held Pepper in his arms and was rocking back and forth as Natasha got up and went to the bar. She poured herself a glass of bourbon and downed it in one gulp. Pulling her cell phone out she placed the call. When the phone was answered...

“Fury here.”

“Nick. It’s Natasha.”

“That’s Colonel Fury agent Romanoff.”

“Oh yeah, right. Sorry.”

He could almost hear the smirk in her voice through the phone. Natasha, also called the Black Widow, was a top notch agent who had never failed on a mission but she was also a bit of a loose cannon. Still, she was invaluable to the SHIELD organization; the perfect mix of sexy and deadly, she was up to whatever a mission called for.

“Is the situation under control?” Fury asked.

“Yes. Tony is taken care of.”

“He’s alright isn’t he?”

“Of course. Well, at least physically he’s fine.”

“What’s that supposed to mean?”

“There was a bit of a hiccup in the plan sir. It was Potts. She showed up unexpectedly. I had to take care of her too.”

“WHAT!?!?! DAMMIT NATASHA! You were supposed to use the reporter. I told you Pepper was too valuable to us. Plus Tony’s got a thing for her. This could push him over the edge.”

“So, send him to f***ing therapy! What was I supposed to do sir? She walked right in while I was eliminating Christine. There is no way she’d play ball. We both know that.”

She heard Nick Fury, head of SHIELD; take a deep sigh on the other end.

“There’s nothing we can do now. I’ll send a cleanup crew right away.”

“What about me sir? Should I come in for a debrief?”

“No. Even with the cover story this will be a big deal when it hits the news. I want you out of the country. Head to our British safe house and await further instructions.”

“Understood sir.”

“Oh and Natasha...good job.”

“Thank you sir.”

In an undisclosed location, Nick Fury leaned back in his chair in a dimly lit bare office and thought for several long minutes. He knew the truth, he wasn’t stupid. Natasha had lobbied to eliminate Pepper from the beginning. And she was not the sort of woman to like being overruled.

Fury pressed a button on his phone, “Get me M at MI6.”

Thirty seconds later, a female voice with a British accent came on the line, “Nick, this is M. How can I be of assistance?”

“I’m afraid I have a pretty major request of you?”

“Anything Nick, you know that.”

“I have an agent I need eliminated. She will be in England tomorrow, at one of our safe houses. Do you have anyone who could do the job? She’s highly trained and very dangerous, a class six. Frankly, she’s one of the best I have.”

“My, she must really have buggered the pooch for you to be taking her out then. But yes, Bond is just back from a holiday. He’s the best I have.”

“Good, I’ll send you the details on her soon. Thanks M.”

Fury turned to his computer and called up Natasha’s personnel file. He muttered to himself as he typed, “Dammit Natasha, why can’t you just follow orders?”

As he typed, across the top of the screen in large red letters appeared: TERMINATION APPROVED!

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PostPosted: May Sun 02, 2010 9:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow that was a super awesome story dbud. You're best yet.
The writing is top notch and wonderfully detailed. clapping clapping
Loved your take on Iron man and the magnificent Natasha, really fun idea.

The sex scene was fun and written with a very tongue in cheek roughness, loved his backdoor entrance. laugh
He really gave it to her, didn't he. laugh

I loved the portrail of Natahsa in this one, you write her and her intensions so well and all the dialouge was suberb and often very funny.
The action was vivid and everything well described but it did help that I have a clear picture of Stark's house in my head already, kudos on picking it as the location, really helped paint the picture in my head.

Christine's demise was just outstanding and much to my taste in detail. yay
I espeically love dit how Tony discovered her dead in bed the next day and Natasha's bulls**t story was inspired, admire that girl.

Pepper's death was great too, perhaps a bit too much beating for my taste personally but the action was great and the way she was finished off superb. clapping

I liked all the playful touched in the story such as Natasha's jungle cat jump, cutting off Pepper.

I loved Natasha's time alone lying next to Christine's body, nice. clapping

The ending sets up what I so hope you have planned as a sequel, now that will be a story for the ages. I can't imagine a better target for 007 than her. I am holding my breath over it. Very Happy

Again great story, enjoyed it very much.

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PostPosted: May Sun 02, 2010 9:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you very much Johann/fleming. I am so glad you liked the story. High praise from you, thanks again. Originally, it was just Pepper she killed but then I saw a clip of Leslie Bibb as the reporter and found out she was in the new movie so I couldn't help but add her. I also tacked on the ending with Fury ordering her dead. As i wrote it, i wasn't sure if I would continue it, but I might try too. I would want more than just one scene between Natasha an Bond though so I would need to think about it more.

PS. the one line I forgot but wanted to put in was a line where Pepper asks why Natasha is doing this and Natasha's reply is because 'you tried to keep my out of this sequal!' A reference to Gwenyth and Scarletts off camera 'issues' as have been reported in tabloids.
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That line about the sequel is hilarious. laugh

Oh please continue it, you've set it up so perfectly and she's far too amazing not to get a stunning end. I sincearly hope you will. Very Happy

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I totally agree with Johann that was very awesome, I had no idea that there was some dirty heat between Scarlett and Paltrow. Great action on Pepper's ass being kicked to I must say (Oh yeah!)

It was great how Nick Fury contacted M at M-16 to 'send for the man' and deal with Black Widow and have her punished.

Come to think of it, speaking of punishment, even after looking at yours and Johann's I was thinking of 'maybe' just maybe adding a possible crossover with Black Widow in my Punisher story. She is sent by SHIELD to find and stop the punisher since *spoiler* they are investigating the Punisher.

Black Widow either fights the Punisher (Kate Beckinsale) or one of the other supervillainesses that wants a piece of the Punisher but Black Widow ends up meeting her match in a not too gruesome way. Overall, this was good bro. yay Oh yes
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Okay wow Frank, it was Frank wasn't it dilak?
That idea is amazing and brings joy to my heart.
Wow. Really one of the better ones I've heard, can not wait for that story. Very Happy clapping
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PostPosted: May Wed 05, 2010 11:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

To both fleming and dilak, again thanks for the feedback and glad you liked it.

To dilak specifically, hope you will write your story. I agree with fleming from his other post, don't feel down on yourself because of your writing. just write the best story you can and try to improve. i LOVE the cast and the ideas of scarlett and the punisher (kate B) meeting up or even scarlett vs a villian.

I will also offer this, if you want/need someone to help you with your writing, I would be happy too. I consider myself a decent writer (for this type of stuff) and would be happy for you to email me a draft and offer my thoughts, either on the writing itself or the plot/action. If not, thats fine, not going to hurt my feelings or anything but if you want I'd be happy to.

Also, fleming's Suburbia story and your Punisher idead have stoked the fires of an idea I have had for quite a while. There has been some discussion of a Smoking Aces type story but with an all female cast on this board. Based on that thought, I have wanted to do a female spy story using various spy/assassin characters in it. I have thought of using the real Punisher (Frank Castle) from the comic as the protagonist who eliminates various bad girls and runs into some good ones too who try to stop him. Or maybe having various male killers, like Sabertooth, Bulleyes and or the Punisher.

Also, have thought about just using the female characters on various missions and maybe including some sex like in the IM2 story. Oh well, just some thoughts. Have to work out the details.

Maybe I will submit a cast list to see what you guys think.
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dbud, that idea of yours is very interesting and I'd like to see it happen. Love the whole smokin aces feel to it, after all the suburbia story is in part inspired by it, well the concept of it is and also my Grand hotel was heavily inspired by that film but I do think my version was better than the film. laugh

Oh and by the way, you're definitly better than decent.
Would love to see a cast list but its up to you.

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PostPosted: May Thu 06, 2010 9:34 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well thanks for the compliment fleming.

I'll list some thoughts on characters. My issue is there are so many possibilities and possible plots I have trouble figuring out what to do so I end up doing nothing.

The flavor would be a spy vs spy type story along the lines of Smoking Aces. Various spies and cops working for the government versus assassins, that sort of story. Could be single characters working alone or teams. Also, I am not sure if it would be a plot that takes place in a single night/location, like your Grand Hotel, where all the characters are brought together for some reason. Or if it would be a longer story with various locations and scenes.

One thought was along the horror genre but using spies/assassins instead of innocent victims. It could be various characters lured/hired to come to an island resort where they are picked off by an unseen killer. Just a thought.

Possible cast ideas:

sarah walker (chuck)
angelina jolie as fox (wanted), or evelyn salt, or Jane Smith or even lara croft
renee walker (24)
sydney bristow and/or rachel gibson (alias)
halle berry as jinx
anne hathaway as Agent 99
kristen kreuk as chun li
jordana brewster as lucy diamond
sienna miller as the baroness
mila kunis as mona sax
jessica alba as max
jessica biel as abigail whistler
catherine zeta jones as virginia baker (Entrapment)


Another thought is to take a bunch of younger female characters from unrelated shows and have them be rookie agents/cops, such as:
dawn summers (BtVS)
chloe sullivan (smallville)
rory gilmore (gilmore girls)
kim bauer (24)
veronica mars

possible male characters:
bullseye
frank castle, the punisher
agent 23 (dwayne johnson fro get smart)
max smart
chuck

again, there are probably a lot more characters and not all the above list would be included, just some ideas.

PS: since you mentioned you are from Iceland, how is your volcano?
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PostPosted: May Thu 06, 2010 11:24 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

dbud, I gotta say it all sounds good what you're thinking.
I'd say that for me I'd most like to see you do either a one location where they are brought together in one night, always love those scenario's so much.

The slasher/horror idea where spies/assassins ar lured to the island is masterful, do that please. Love those kinds of stories so muc hand with some of those characters its just even better. Wow, hope you do that.

Whatever you do, don't do nothing please.

Gotta say that the rookie idea sounds less appealing though, but then again the other two are just so good they overshadow it.

Love the cast idea's as you must know I would, really a wow thing really, love them all and have admired all these characters (aside from Jinx).

There's one thing I must mention and forgive me if I am being pushy but if you were to use Sarah Walker that would obviously be a dream come true for me but seeing as how much she means to me, I can't but plead that you'd show her a certain consideration to my tastes and tone down certain aspects of your style in her case, that is if you use her.

She is so special to me that however good the rest of the story is, if her end would be even in the slightest not perfect for me, it would perhaps not ruin the story for me but very close to it.
She's the only one who has this effect on me and the only one I'd ever even dare to mention this about to you.
Just so you know, if you use her and take this under consideration, you'll have my deepest gratitude.
Sorry again if I sound rude or pushy, just can't help it when it comes to her.
P.s.
When I say its her that has the effect on me, I don't mean just the character, its Yvonne in every form.

Like I said, just don't do nothing, that's be a great loss for both of us Very Happy
The slasher spin idea to it, really impresses me.


Well for the volcano, well I don't know too well. Its far from me and I have felt no effects from it and I never really follow the news but I do know that things near it are tense and its causing some serious ruins for farms and roads near it but luckily there's no large population near it.
Its mostly the ash and some floods caused by it that cause proplems more than the eruption itself.
One worry is that a larger volcano near it might go up as well sooner than later and that would really f**k up europe as well as Iceland.
Last time it erupted in 1700-something, the country nearly starved to death as the ash destroyed all crops, killed animals and blocked out the sun as I have read.
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Thats for the thoughts, glad you like the ideas.

I do like the idea of a killer taking out the various women. the issue with that one is that it would have to be all heroines or villians and not a mixed group, as it seems like it would be hard to come up with a good reason for a bunch of governement agents/cops and assassins to all be in the same place without all trying to kill each other.

one additional idea i had while reading your feedback was to do a variation/combination of the two. A bunch of agents are sent to a remote location for training. while there, a group of assassins show up to take them out and the two sides have to fight to survive. this would be more of the traditional assassins vs agents story and so not the slasher one, but it would allow for more characters and kills. just another thought.

on the rookies idea, that wasn't intended to be a stand alone story, more like a chapter within the larger story. Like an experienced agent, like sarah or renee or sydney, is put in charge of the rookies for a mission and when an experienced assassin shows up, like jane or fox, she takes out the rookies and nearly kills the main agent, who then seeks revenge. that was sort of the thought.

another idea was to use agent 23 as a villian but focus on his life before the get smart movie, as a Control agent but he is relaly a double agent.

on the larger spy story idea, one thought was to include the male counterparts, like john smith and chuck and max smart. this would alow for alot of sex in the story (of the consensual kind) and probably be more of a tongue in cheek (among other locations) type of story. but just another variation.

on the whole sarah walker gets special treatment thing, I assume you don't mind her getting killed. you just don't want her to be TOO defiled. right? i dont mind taking it easy on her and i assume you dont mind her getting killed (as you eliminated her in several stories.)
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dbud wrote:
(I do like the idea of a killer taking out the various women. the issue with that one is that it would have to be all heroines or villians and not a mixed group, as it seems like it would be hard to come up with a good reason for a bunch of governement agents/cops and assassins to all be in the same place without all trying to kill each other.)

Hi am doing it like this so I can accuratly respond to each without mixing it all up in a big mess. laugh
Okay well I see you're point, not used to this myself as I never use the actresses as the characters from movies and tv, just their images but I do like that you do, provides a new feel to it.
Perhaps they could be there on some sort of a treaty or for some sort of negotiation or something.


dbud wrote:
(one additional idea i had while reading your feedback was to do a variation/combination of the two. A bunch of agents are sent to a remote location for training. while there, a group of assassins show up to take them out and the two sides have to fight to survive. this would be more of the traditional assassins vs agents story and so not the slasher one, but it would allow for more characters and kills. just another thought.)

Really dig that idea, its just awesome to tell the truth, not sure if I like it more than the other but at least the same, just so cool. clapping
I actually have had this idea for a long time to do a story where several women find themselves locked in some big mansion and they have a limited time to kill each other before they are all killed.
Last woman standing will be granted life.
I will do this later this year once my endless backlog of stories is thinned out and I have three ways of doing it.
1. The women are just random strangers played by my favorite actresses in the outfit I most like for each without being specific characters.
2. They are superheroines like sue storm, silk spectre, baroness, black widiow and so on.
3. They are spy and assassin characters much like in your idea.
No idea which version I will do but I have been leaning towards nr 1 as I prefer to use my own characters but it might be fun to dable in your style as well.
What do you think?


dbud wrote:
(on the rookies idea, that wasn't intended to be a stand alone story, more like a chapter within the larger story. Like an experienced agent, like sarah or renee or sydney, is put in charge of the rookies for a mission and when an experienced assassin shows up, like jane or fox, she takes out the rookies and nearly kills the main agent, who then seeks revenge. that was sort of the thought.)

Well that's a fine idea as well, just feel you would need a few more rookies.
Like the addition with an older agent and the assassin. yay


dbud wrote:
(another idea was to use agent 23 as a villian but focus on his life before the get smart movie, as a Control agent but he is relaly a double agent.)

Again not bad but I am just not a big get smart fan or know it well enough to be really excited about this idea but with the right women it could come off well.

dbud wrote:
(on the larger spy story idea, one thought was to include the male counterparts, like john smith and chuck and max smart. this would alow for alot of sex in the story (of the consensual kind) and probably be more of a tongue in cheek (among other locations) type of story. but just another variation.)

Yeah, that sounds like fun, especially if it be Chuck(although it would work best if you know the show well, its my favorite so I might be a bit sensitive to it being changed too much. When I do the Bond stories, I try my best to stay very true to the original. Guess this is one reason that I, aside from Bond, prefer to write my own characters, feel too much responsibility to keep them intact but you have shown yourself to be very good at turning them on their heads and having it work well. yay


dbud wrote:
on the whole sarah walker gets special treatment thing, I assume you don't mind her getting killed. you just don't want her to be TOO defiled. right? i dont mind taking it easy on her and i assume you dont mind her getting killed (as you eliminated her in several stories.)

Yes, I certainly hope you kill her, nothing would be better, although she is always the one who its hardest for me to kill off and the one I most miss in Britney and Phil's stories when they kill them off after having been kind enough to me to include her.
Her characters are usually my favorite in stories.
Her dying right is the top in my book and I love the suspene it brings me, not knowing when she goes and so on as I always form an emotional connection to her characters in stories and feel for her.
You were right, not too defiled or tortured with low gore and brutality factor.
Don't want to tell you what to do obviously but I do appreciate her getting a fair amount of post-death coverage and the top of the top is her strangled.

Really appreciate you not minding taking it easy on her for my benefit. Thank you very much. Very Happy

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On the actress vs character thing, I am stikcing to the character theme for now on this idea. I like to use the actresses when i am coming up with brand new characters who are little more than victims, like the 'severence pay' story. but it is more contraining than your usual method where any actress can be any character you want.

i use the characters because I fell like they come with a built in backstory (as in readers who watch the show 'Chuck' or 'Alias' already know a good bit about these characters.) and if they haven't seen the shows or movies they are based on, no loss, the characters are no different than a new character based on that actress. just a different take on the stories is all.

on the assassins versus spies/agents with the Smoking Aces theme, I think I will keep that for more of a mission based story.

one thought i had which is a total suspension of disbelief would be to have an island where the agents/assassins all go that is a neutral place. It's the one place/resort/country where they know no one will try to kill them. Every year a bunch go and relax. This idea came up when I was doing more fanfic (before the snuff parts got added) and so the idea was that a lot of them are lesbians and engage in all sorts of girl on girl fun. Then a killer shows up and starts offing them. Sort of a spy version of Camp Crysktal Lake.

Based on your comments and thinking about it some more, I am leaning towards the remote location/being picked off idea for now.

On that idea, i guess the main issue is whether to use a male or female killer? and also, is the killer a total unknown (in the slasher vein) or is he/she a double agent within the group, or a known person but whose idenity at the beginning in unknown? Not sure what to do although I do have an idea I am formulating. it is a variation of the agents ina remaote location idea.

On your ideas of 1) random collection of women 2) superheroines 3) spy vs assassin. They could all work but i agree I like the random women the best. and the spies and assassins the second best. If you are going to use celebs as the templates but not characters like I do, then definately #1. This way also, the idea that the women are not trained killers adds to the fun, having them have to kill for the first time and not be good at it is always cool. With the agents, the kills are either quite or you have to play up the sadistic nature of the killer, which doesn't always fit the character. The issue with the superheroines is the difference in power level. Could Silk Spectre really beat Sue Storm? But remove Sue Storm and put in Lara Croft and maybe Faith or Buffy or Max/Dark Angel, and you might have a good cast. But this also seems to be the same as #2 but with a slight difference in characters.

I also like the idea of various characters lured/kidnapped and forced to fight or picked off. I have lots of tv/movie characters that could fit well into that sort of story without being spies or agents or any trained person. I might take a shot at that one too. it would be along the lines of your Wedding/Bride story.

One idea I had that is similar is a sort of Fight Club idea. Powerful men and women hire or force women to fight. Winners live, losers die. This way there could be a mix of good and bad. i could see Faith doing it for money while Buffy is forced because they havee her sister. Or Sarah is kidnapped and forced to fight but Jane Smith is a willing participant.

The rookies idea would probably fit in with the mission gone wrong storyline. Save that for another time.

On agent 23, i am just always looking for ways to get male killlers into the mix because they allow for rougher stories than the women, which can be sexier and more fun, but no rape and such.

Including the men would just allow for some escapades in between the action. Like Sarah and Chuck doing it and then getting caught or called into a mission. Or Jane and John Smith having sex after a fight/kill because it turns them on.

Some more ideas to percolate. I do want to try to write some of these ideas up. But you will have to wait for them as I will be out of town for a while starting tomorrow.

But don't worry about starving if that big volcano goes off. If that happens, I'll send you a fruit basket! Very Happy
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On the actress vs character thing, I am stikcing to the character theme for now on this idea. I like to use the actresses when i am coming up with brand new characters who are little more than victims, like the 'severence pay' story. but it is more contraining than your usual method where any actress can be any character you want.

i use the characters because I fell like they come with a built in backstory (as in readers who watch the show 'Chuck' or 'Alias' already know a good bit about these characters.) and if they haven't seen the shows or movies they are based on, no loss, the characters are no different than a new character based on that actress. just a different take on the stories is all.

THATS ACTUALLY A VERY GOOD EXPLANATION AND MAKES ALOT OF SENSE AND I CAN IMAGINE ITS A TIMESAVER AS WELL AS A USEFUL TOOL, PLUS IF ITS A CHARACTER YOU KNOW AND LIKE ITS AN EXTRA LITTLE KICK.

on the assassins versus spies/agents with the Smoking Aces theme, I think I will keep that for more of a mission based story.

SOUNDS GOOD.

one thought i had which is a total suspension of disbelief would be to have an island where the agents/assassins all go that is a neutral place. It's the one place/resort/country where they know no one will try to kill them. Every year a bunch go and relax. This idea came up when I was doing more fanfic (before the snuff parts got added) and so the idea was that a lot of them are lesbians and engage in all sorts of girl on girl fun. Then a killer shows up and starts offing them. Sort of a spy version of Camp Crysktal Lake.

ITS CRAZY HOW MUCH I LIKE THAT IDEA, REALLY LOVE IT AND I CAN'T WAIT FOR IT, HOPE YOU DO IT LIKE THAT.
ESPECIALLY IF SARAH'S ONE OF THEM AND THAT FEELING THAT SHE COULD GO AT ANY MOMENT OR POSSIBLY LAST A LONG TIME, IT ADDS SO MUCH EXCITMENT FOR ME. I LOVE THESE KINDS OF STORIES, ALWAYS HAVE AND THE REASON I WORTE THE BACHELORETTE ONE IS BECAUSE I JUST WANTED TO READ ONE LIKE IT DONE HERE.
WILL DO ANOTHER IN THIS GENRE LATER THIS YEAR AS WELL, I INTEND TO SET IT AT A MALL, ALWAYS THOUGHT IT WOULD MAKE A COOL SLASHER PICKING ONE OF AT A TIME SETTING FOR SOME REASON. IT'D BE AT NIGHT AND ABANDONED AND THE WOMEN ARE LOCKED INSIDE WITH A MAD KILLER DYING ONE AFTER THE OTHER.
YVONNE ALREADY HAS A ROLE IN THAT ONE, WELL SHE PRETTY MUCH HAS A ROLE IN ANYTHING I INTEND TO DO...EVER. LOL.

Based on your comments and thinking about it some more, I am leaning towards the remote location/being picked off idea for now.

GREAT, ITS THE ONE I AM MOST EXCITED ABOUT.

On that idea, i guess the main issue is whether to use a male or female killer? and also, is the killer a total unknown (in the slasher vein) or is he/she a double agent within the group, or a known person but whose idenity at the beginning in unknown? Not sure what to do although I do have an idea I am formulating. it is a variation of the agents ina remaote location idea.

I LIKE THAT ITS ONE OF THEM AND WE DON'T KNOW WHO AND IT CAN BE ANY OF THEM, REALLY ADDS SUSPENSE TO IT.

On your ideas of 1) random collection of women 2) superheroines 3) spy vs assassin. They could all work but i agree I like the random women the best. and the spies and assassins the second best. If you are going to use celebs as the templates but not characters like I do, then definately #1. This way also, the idea that the women are not trained killers adds to the fun, having them have to kill for the first time and not be good at it is always cool. With the agents, the kills are either quite or you have to play up the sadistic nature of the killer, which doesn't always fit the character. The issue with the superheroines is the difference in power level. Could Silk Spectre really beat Sue Storm? But remove Sue Storm and put in Lara Croft and maybe Faith or Buffy or Max/Dark Angel, and you might have a good cast. But this also seems to be the same as #2 but with a slight difference in characters.

I AGREE, THE RANDOM WOMEN IS THE WAY TO GO, HADN'T EVEN THOUGHT OF THE THEY DON'T KNOW HOW TO KILL ASPECT OF IT, LIKE THAT.
I DO KNOW THEY'LL BE 8 OF THEM AND THAT ONE OF THEM IS THE CLEAR MOST GIFTED KILLER OR MOST COLD BLOODED, SHE'S IN IT TO WIN.
THE CAST REALLY WILL BE MY TOP FAVORITES I THINK TO ADD TO THE EXPERIANCE A BIT.

I WOULD HOWEVER NEVER DISCARD SUE STORM, SHE'S MY FAVORITE OF THEM ALL, ALBA IN THAT SUIT :excited: laugh BUT I SEE YOUR POINT ABOUT THE POWERS, HADN'T THOUGHT OF IT BUT I DO SEE IT AS FUN THAT THEY ARE ON SORT OF DIFFERENT KEELS, SOME WITH POWERS, OTHERS WITH WEAPONS LIKE BARONESS OR LARA (WHO WAS ALWAYS IN THE MIX) MAKES FOR CLEAR MAYHEM AND SORT OF ORIGINAL SCENARIO'S.
I CAN JUST SEE SUE EXPLOIDING HER FORCEFIELD ONLY TO DIE WHEN SHE'S TRICKED TO DROP IT A MOMENT OR LARA GETTING STRANGLED BY POISON IVY'S VINES AS IT SNEEKS UP ON HER WHILE SHE IS IENGAGED IN A FIREFIGHT OR SILK SPECTRE AND BLACK WIDOW GOING ON EACH OTHER WIT HTHEIR FISTS. I SEE I OR SOMEONE ELSE HAS TO DO THIS AT SOME POINT, MAYBE A GOOD VS EVIL BATTLE OR SOMETHING.

I also like the idea of various characters lured/kidnapped and forced to fight or picked off. I have lots of tv/movie characters that could fit well into that sort of story without being spies or agents or any trained person. I might take a shot at that one too. it would be along the lines of your Wedding/Bride story.

YEAH DEFINITLY DO, LIKE I SAID I LOVE THESE SORTS OF STORIES.

One idea I had that is similar is a sort of Fight Club idea. Powerful men and women hire or force women to fight. Winners live, losers die. This way there could be a mix of good and bad. i could see Faith doing it for money while Buffy is forced because they havee her sister. Or Sarah is kidnapped and forced to fight but Jane Smith is a willing participant.

The rookies idea would probably fit in with the mission gone wrong storyline. Save that for another time.

On agent 23, i am just always looking for ways to get male killlers into the mix because they allow for rougher stories than the women, which can be sexier and more fun, but no rape and such.

I SEE WHAT YOU MEAN BUT I DO FOR THE MOST PART PREFER WOMEN KILLERS AS I LIKE TO BE THE OBSERVER IF YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAN AND IF ITS A MAN I MIGHT START SEEING IT FROM HIS POINT OF VIEW AND I DISLIKE THAT FOR THE MOST PART, THERE ARE EXEPTIONS OFF COURSE.
PLUS I DON'T MUCH LIKE TO HAVE THINGS TOO ROUGH. I VERY MUCH VISUALISE MY STORIES AS MOVIES AND DON'T LIKE IT TO GET TOO REAL.
I NEED THE FANTASY ELEMENT IN THERE.
THE SMALL SHORT I AM WORKING ON NOW WITH YVONNE IS VERY MUCH IN CONTRAST TO THIS, I AM MAKING IT A BIT MORE REAL AND A MAN KILLER AS WELL AND I DO FIND MYSELF PICTURING MYSELF AS THE KILLER WHICH I DISLIKE BUT SEEING AS ITS HER AND LIKE MY DREAM SCENARIO I AM LETTING IT SLIDE THIS ONCE.
LETS SAY THAT WHAT THE KILLER THINKS ABOUT HER AND WHAT EFFECT SHE HAS ON HIM IS THE SAME AS SHE HAS ON ME SO I AM LENDING THAT OF MYSELF TO THAT CHARACTER.
HE DOES FALL FOR HER BUT STILL ENDS UP KILLING HER AS ITS HIS DUTY DESPITE HIS FEELINGS BUT THE REAL ME WOULD FOLLOW HIS HEART AND NOT MY DUTY IN THAT SCENARIO, I'D SAVE HER BUT HE DOESN'T.
I AM MAKING SURE AS NOT TO BE TOO ROUGH ON HER AND GIVING HER THE ADMIRATION SHE DESERVES.

Including the men would just allow for some escapades in between the action. Like Sarah and Chuck doing it and then getting caught or called into a mission. Or Jane and John Smith having sex after a fight/kill because it turns them on.

I LIKE THAT, SOUNDS FUN.

Some more ideas to percolate. I do want to try to write some of these ideas up. But you will have to wait for them as I will be out of town for a while starting tomorrow.

BUMMER, WAS GETTING REAL EXCITED ABOUT IT BUT I HAVE SOMETHING TO LOOK FORWARD TO.
BETWEEN YOUR IDEA'S, DILAK'S IDEA'S, PHIL'S GREAT STORY AND AL LTHE AWESOME THINGS BRITNEY IS ALWAYS DOING, I FEEL I AM BEING SO SPOILED, HAVE TO TRY MY BEST TO DO MY SHARE AS WELL, AM JUGGLING LIKE FOUR STORIES RIGHT NOW SO LETS HOPE I MANAGE TO POST SOMETHING SOON.

I DO HOPE YOU GIVE THE AGENTS ON ISLAND GETTING PICKED OFF ONE BY ONE THE FIRST GO, REALLY, REALLY EXCITED ABOUT THAT. yay
BUT HAVE A GOOD TRIP.

But don't worry about starving if that big volcano goes off. If that happens, I'll send you a fruit basket!

THANKS BUT IF IT BLOWS, I DOUBT ANY PLANES WOULD FLY ON THIS HEMISPHERE FOR A WHILE.
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PostPosted: May Thu 06, 2010 9:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great comments and ideas. A few responses before I head to bed so I can get up early ot make a flight.

On your super-heroine forced fight idea. Once you explain it, i like it. I was concerned on the differences in power levels, but when you think about it, that could really create some interesting dynamics and fun fights.

I have thought about the story we discussed and have at least a start on it planned. i hoped to write some of it tonight and maybe even post a chapter but haven't had time. Sorry. Hopfully in the next week or so I can get it nailed down and posted.

And on the fruit basket, dont worry about it. I'll drop it in the Atlantic Ocean with a card that says: Fleming, Iceland. I'm sure it will get there.
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PostPosted: May Fri 07, 2010 7:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Guys, I've been MIA for a long while and I am very, very sorry. no way

I see there has been a lot going on and I have to say thank you all for the compliments and I will not disappoint with the Punisher. I love the ideas of the fight club, Crystal Lake and all the other ones. (Oh Yeah!)

Dbud, bro is there anyway to e-mail you? I have no problems with you giving me private feedback and all.

To be honest, I was heavily inspired by Alicia Keys role in Smoking Aces and that's how I came up with *spoiler* the borderline super villainess 'Loco Lola' for her. As for the Grand Hotel I have so, got to check that out. (Oh yeah!)

Sorry for the excitement but its great to be back.

Johann I don't know if I'll ever do a spy story like you and Phil but perhaps a 'metal gear solid' based theme I may settle for, but I'm not sure, you guys are the best.

Dbuds version of the Punisher and random chicks getting dusted by him and other villains rocks. The idea of squeezing in other video game and comic book based girls also rocks too. In fact, all of the ideas mentioned rock, I can't sum it up enough I'm just blown away right now. (HELL YEAH!)

A note to add, what about video game villains like M.Bison choking Chun Li to death or Zangief fatally crushing Sakura, Cammy, or Rose's spine on his knee or Sephiroth fatally throat slashing or garroting Tifa to death or maybe adding girls from Dead or Alive (give them casts no doubt) and let some of them get killed by guys from that game or from other movies or comics? (Oh yeah!)

Also, since I live in New York it will make it very easy to write the Punisher story too. While I will still juggle between so many other things I will post the casts for the Punisher. Tell what you think. Thank you again Johann and dbud.

Frank
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PostPosted: May Fri 07, 2010 7:49 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Dilak, I am sure you won't disappont with the Punisher, can't wait for it. Very Happy

By all means check out Grand hotel, hope you'll like it but be warned, its long, long, long. laugh
Alicia Keys in her Smokin aces get up is part of that cast so enjoy.

Thanks for the spy story compliment, its great too hear and I know Phil will feel the same way.

Can't say about the video game idea, have no knowledge of it.
Only videogames I've played in years are GTA and Hitman.

Jóhann. Very Happy
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PostPosted: May Sun 09, 2010 6:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

To dilak,

I have posted my email in some of my earlier stories but forgot in these past few. It is dbud900@yahoo.com.

Feel free to send me anything you wrote and I will do my best to read it over and provide some feedback. You can send me the whole story or chapters/parts, whichever you want. Just let me know if you are looking for writing help (as in with the structure of the story) or with the plot (as in where the story goes next).

Again, your Punisher story sounds really good. Don't compare your writing to others anf eel its not up to snuff (haha, get it, snuff? Very Happy )

The cast you have looks great and the story process can be improved.

I read parts of Grand Hotel and it was very good and a fun story. Also, glad you are excited about the future stories. I am hoping to post something pretty soon.

PS. Just saw you had posted the Punisher story, or part thereof. look forward to checking it out.

One more edit to add: I have thought for a good while now about using Bison as a villian in a story. In the Chun Li movie, he was tough but also more of a business man too, so he would work well. I also like the DOA women and want to use them too, just hard to get a good story to do it with. But I like the ideas.
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PostPosted: May Sun 16, 2010 11:57 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hmm, some lovely hot kills by Natasha there ... enough to make a kinky, wicked girl like me a little wet ... Tee hee! :excited: Oh yes clapping Very Happy

Meaow
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PostPosted: Jan Wed 19, 2011 3:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like this story, and I want Dbud to do the Chun Li one as well!
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PostPosted: Jan Wed 19, 2011 7:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

been a while since i thought about this story, glad you liked it. no promises on the chun li story but it is one i have thought about.
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PostPosted: Jan Wed 19, 2011 10:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

We don't have enough game babes (or superheroines for that matter) on this board.
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PostPosted: Jan Thu 20, 2011 2:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Bud:

I had read this story months ago, but never got around to commenting.

The opening sex scene was excellent, the double cross and double, double cross of her own agency a real surprise.

A good read, enjoyed the twists and turns.

Excellent descriptions of deaths, fights and plot flow.

I'll look for the next chapter.
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